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[Dark_Poet]

When you raised me I never questioned
No matter how weird, it never lessened...

No matter how little you spoke
It felt natural
No matter how little you cared
I remained formal

You shielded me from the world
locked in shadows
Afraid of the days
When you'd have to let go

I cried for saturation
you screamed damnation
You hindered my situation
unless it fit your indoctrinations

Now I'm older
Slowly growing bolder
Crying in pain
Yet the situations just another blood stain

You twist the knife every chance
When I question you dance
Afraid to take the blame
No matter the evidence
You always feel the same

Ignorance is bliss
I'll be your rationality
Because of you
You've added to my dis-functionality

Even though I've explained in detail
You still see yourself as one to hail
But because of this things have grown stale

I've got to make a choice
Should I exile and rejoice
Or once again use my voice

Tired of the pain you cause
Tired of hearing the same old clause....

One things for certain

If you lose
It wasn't easy to choose

But I deserve better
Take care of yourself
Even though I know I loved you better

 

[Drama]

Beauuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuutiful!!!!!!! Well I am quite intriguied about who you talk about. I have an idea in mind but dare not say it. Thank you for sharing, Poet.

 

[Dark_Poet]

The person I talk about is my struggles with my father.

Thanks so much for your kind words!
Take care!

 

[Drama]

I honeslty thought you were talking about your mother for some reason. But they're both parents so I was close <.< .

It's good that you're able to express yourself through poetry. And I encourage you. It really help. AND I hope you'd share more

 

[DreamerDeceiver]

This is a very moving piece, and well done.

 

[NightHawkJohn]

I really like this.

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

hehehe, that's some good stuff It seems like you've got the standard rhyming schemes under control here perhaps you should move on to a different/slightly more difficult rhyming scheme ? How about you try going for ABAB for a change ? Might really suit you

 

[Dark_Poet]

This is a very moving piece, and well done.

Thank you very much!

I really like this.

Thanks for the kind words!

hehehe, that's some good stuff It seems like you've got the standard rhyming schemes under control here perhaps you should move on to a different/slightly more difficult rhyming scheme ? How about you try going for ABAB for a change ? Might really suit you

Thank you!

Do you mean rhyming every other word?

Sorry, I admittedly don't know much about poems.
When I get really sad, I suppose this is how I deal with it.

I do this, and I draw from time to time.

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

Yup, ABAB is rhyming every other word Perhaps you should try writing when you're NOT sad for a change Might work out well for you.