poem

[Joseph]

I've written a handful of poems in my life, usually stupid limericks! So when something comes to me, I share it.

haunted

patient and slow, desolate and cold, immortal, he comes for me

in those wide open places, under an exposed february sky

in those cozy and cramped spaces, under a blanket where i lie

with each visit, he chips away a small piece

he mixes agony and pain, with fear and sorrow

he promises me i'll never have a lonely tomorrow

he knows me like no other, grain for grain

he, the eroder of souls

 

[Ladysphinx]

It's pretty good I like poetry with a darkness in them, especially ones that make you think.

 

[Joseph]

Thank you, Ladysphinx. Can you guess who the "he" is in my poem? It would be almost impossible to, but I'm always interested in how other people's minds work.

 

[spectacles]

I read it several times, simply reading it seems like he is God, but Im suspicious u are personifying a feeling, cant really tell who he is. Who is it!!! lol

 

[Joseph]

I read it several times, simply reading it seems like he is God, but Im suspicious u are personifying a feeling, cant really tell who he is. Who is it!!! lol

Wow, you are intuitive.

 

[spectacles]

Now my intuition tells me u are not gonna tell me lol, I understand, theres nothing better than free interpretation for poetry. Nice poem btw

 

[Peter Lorre]

The 'he' is (the need for) a drug/drugdealer. His Golden Brown or his captain Jack.

Don't worry though Joseph, Captain Jack will get you by tonight; just a little push, and you'll be smiling...

 

[Joseph]

Ha! Thanks for the interest guys. Proof that poetry means whatever we read into it.

Everybody's interpretation was great. Peter Lorre, I hadn't even considered your interpretation, although it fits absolutely perfect (I say this as a recovered drug addict).

The HE is Loneliness

"He promises me I'll never have a lonely tomorrow" means that loneliness tells me that he is different, that he will always be there, that he will never leave me alone, that I will always have someone/something...loneliness.

Kind of an ironic thought.

 

[Ladysphinx]

Sorry a bit late but I thought that 'He' was depression. I can relate to that. Posted a poem very simular to this, bit longer Called 'You & me'.

 

[Joseph]

Sorry a bit late but I thought that 'He' was depression.

Very close.