2:36 AM.

[Doubt The Rabbit]

2:36 AM

The robin jitters and stirs up its feathers.
It chirps at around midday.
The children watch with wistful sighs—
Ignore the crow down the way.
The robin’s voice takes grasp their hearts
And so they’d rather stay
To hear the sweet and shallow song
Than what the crow will say.

 

[Dark_Poet]

Interesting.
I can relate to the crow completely if I read it right.

Thanks for posting!

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

Nice one Short and to the point, I like that.

(The linguist in me is gnawing at my brain, telling me that the "will" in the last line should be a "would" Xd I hate this.. I should really go to school less often... >_> )

 

[Doubt The Rabbit]

2:36 AM

The robin jitters and stirs up its feathers.
It chirps at around midday.
The children watch with wistful sighs—
Ignore the crow down the way.
The robin’s voice takes grasp their hearts
And so they’d rather stay
To hear the sweet and shallow song
Than what the crow would say.

There ya go.

 

[theSmokingRabbit]

2:36 AM

The robin jitters and stirs up its feathers.
It chirps at around midday.
The children watch with wistful sighs—
Ignore the crow down the way.
The robin’s voice takes grasp their hearts
And so they’d rather stay
To hear the sweet and shallow song
Than what the crow would say.

There ya go.

Eh... I kind of like it the original way. You're allowed to mess with that sort of stuff a little bit. Art can't be restricted to the laws of English!

 

[SophiaGrace]

The grammar police are gonna getcha and lockya up with all those horrible abbreviation texters.

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

The grammar police are gonna getcha and lockya up with all those horrible abbreviation texters.

Yeah.. well, I just hope I'm not going to turn into one of those one day... It's just that what I study kind of requires me to be one >_> And Buddha, I know.. I don't think I've even written one poem in correct English.. but now that I study English, the ungrammaticality of it just sticks out so much more

 

[Doubt The Rabbit]

The grammar police are gonna getcha and lockya up with all those horrible abbreviation texters.

Yeah.. well, I just hope I'm not going to turn into one of those one day... It's just that what I study kind of requires me to be one >_> And Buddha, I know.. I don't think I've even written one poem in correct English.. but now that I study English, the ungrammaticality of it just sticks out so much more

You have a stunning lack of periods and you should never begin a sentence with "and." Just kidding.

 

[Vagrant Legacy]

The grammar police are gonna getcha and lockya up with all those horrible abbreviation texters.

Yeah.. well, I just hope I'm not going to turn into one of those one day... It's just that what I study kind of requires me to be one >_> And Buddha, I know.. I don't think I've even written one poem in correct English.. but now that I study English, the ungrammaticality of it just sticks out so much more

You have a stunning lack of periods and you should never begin a sentence with "and." Just kidding.

And I'm proud of it too Seriously though, in informal settings, I couldn't care less about my grammar and spelling. Should I however, find the guts to hand in something like this for an essay, I think one of my professors would castrate me in public

 

[Doubt The Rabbit]

D:
Sounds like my high school english analysis teacher. xD